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    dots Submission Name: AQUA GENdots
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    Author: Porcelaine
    ASL Info:    27/F/Croatia
    Elite Ratio:    3.9 - 880/703/256
    Words: 87
    Class/Type: Poetry/
    Total Views: 1040
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 614



    Description:
       It's about a water elemental, a mythological humanoid.


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    Blue heart, water heart
    Never do I wish to part
    Must I swim or may I sink
    Waves of beauty dare to drink

    Deep enigma, deep ethereal
    Saphire realm in water burial
    Faith in indigo, soft tranquility
    Element invulnerability

    Cradle sea and relic loom
    Tears that coat the planet's womb
    Blue seduced, I am a minion
    Heart of mine is your dominion

    Master change, king of tides
    Other life within abides
    Cascade cove from underneath
    Fire lone can never sheathe






    Submitted on 2006-10-02 09:16:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Beautifully abstract, as I like it. Makes me dream "in blue".
    | Posted on 2006-10-07 00:00:00 | by Non-Sens-Uality | [ Reply to This ]
      Not bad, even for those who cannot find themselve drifting off into the setting of any writing, it is forced upon you anyway. Very descriptive and excellently worded. Slightly monotonous but I dig it regardless

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    | Posted on 2006-10-02 00:00:00 | by Frost | [ Reply to This ]
      first view, first comment. cool. Ok. I like this, it has reference to things i understand( i think). You speak of Neptune, Mythological Roman God of the sea. Equivalent of Poseiden. its good though. keep it up.
    | Posted on 2006-10-02 00:00:00 | by Vampiric Death | [ Reply to This ]


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