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    dots Submission Name: do with it as you wishdots

    Author: dark figure
    ASL Info:    17/m/uk
    Elite Ratio:    4.19 - 66/74/29
    Words: 81
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       its all i have or had so take it before it turns to stone in my hands

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    dotsdo with it as you wishdots

    from me to you
    is this gift
    dont loose it
    for its all i have

    accept it please
    dont say no
    im not loosing any thing
    by giving this to you

    my heart on a silver plate
    would be gold
    but this life i lived was full of

    but its all i have
    so take it
    and do with it as you wish
    for its all i have

    and im giving it to you

    Submitted on 2006-10-02 13:40:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      whoa, that's kinda deep man. I really like

    "my heart on a silver plate
    would be gold
    but this life i lived was full of

    that is so true for most people, I know with myself it stand firm; hell silver would probabily be an improvement. And while I understand, I thnk that if you divulged into why it's possesing "impurities" and why you're giving it away it could make this amazing! You obviousily got talent to work with, and that's always the first step.
    | Posted on 2006-10-15 00:00:00 | by dismentled | [ Reply to This ]

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