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Submission Name: do with it as you wish dots

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Author:	dark figure
ASL Info:	17/m/uk
Elite Ratio:	4.19 - 66/74/29
Words:	81

Class/Type:	Poetry/Love
Total Views:	761
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
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Description:
its all i have or had so take it before it turns to stone in my hands

do with it as you wish dots

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from me to you
is this gift
dont loose it
for its all i have

accept it please
dont say no
im not loosing any thing
by giving this to you

my heart on a silver plate
would be gold
but this life i lived was full of
impurites

but its all i have
so take it
and do with it as you wish
for its all i have

and im giving it to you

Submitted on 2006-10-02 13:40:19 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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whoa, that's kinda deep man. I really like

"my heart on a silver plate
would be gold
but this life i lived was full of
impurites"

that is so true for most people, I know with myself it stand firm; hell silver would probabily be an improvement. And while I understand, I thnk that if you divulged into why it's possesing "impurities" and why you're giving it away it could make this amazing! You obviousily got talent to work with, and that's always the first step.
| Posted on 2006-10-15 00:00:00 | by dismentled | [ Reply to This ]

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