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Helpless


Author: Sanjhana
ASL Info:    21/f/India
Elite Ratio:    3.52 - 118 /154 /45
Words: 45
Class/Type: Poetry /Depressed
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Description:


when u want something to happen so desperately inspite of being aware that the consequences will be bad for you and noone else...
and it doesnt happen...


Helpless



Unaddressed prayers
Remain unanswered
They linger in the air
And suffocate

Expectations don’t die
But it’s a state of inactivity
An idle wait
Frustrates

Inflamed desire
But there is no water, no sand
Only wind to prod the fire
Its excruciating pain...




Submitted on 2006-10-02 15:22:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I thought it was pretty good. I like the words that you used. Awesome. Good job and keep writing.

~Caotic~
| Posted on 2006-10-02 00:00:00 | by Caotic_Disaster | [ Reply to This ]


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