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    dots Submission Name: some how, some waydots
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    Author: ladiesplanet1
    ASL Info:    23.cali baby
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 720/463/165
    Words: 296
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Love
    Total Views: 449
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1793



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       i wrote this for... someone. i dont want to talk about it right now. i have to think this shit out


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    imagine when between us was okay
    remember it was just the other day
    you said everything would be alright
    and i knew it was true for just that night
    but i knew that you can never see
    that everything was then okay for me
    so many things that you will never know
    of all the things i always try to show

    so many things between us
    will be someday
    maybe not tomorrow
    some how, some way
    you will see that sometimes
    our trusts may try
    but you will know that always
    i will not cry

    how could there be any other way
    without you here with me there was no day
    everything around me was so dark
    you didnt have to make that cruel remark
    ive never had to feel the way i do
    im so alone but still i am so true
    maybe you could show a little trust
    then ill kow that this is not just lust

    so manythings between us
    will be someday
    maybe not tomorrow
    some how, some way
    you will see that sometimes
    our trusts may try
    but will will know that always
    i will not cry

    now that youre here i feel no more pain
    before i was so lost and so insane
    the tears would never cease or stop their fall
    im no longer trapped behind this wall
    the shadows dont terrorize my dreams
    the world is no longer what it seems
    now that youre here everythings alright
    i know that i will never have to fight

    so many things between us
    will be some day
    maybe not tomorrow
    some how, some way
    you will see that sometimes
    our trusts may try
    but you will know that always
    i will not cry




    Submitted on 2006-10-02 15:33:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i know that feeling all to well...hmmm people suck. Anyways this was a good poem keep up the good work.

    Lady D
    | Posted on 2006-10-02 00:00:00 | by Poeticprincess | [ Reply to This ]


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