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    dots Submission Name: Today, I'll Be My Other Selfdots
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    Author: darkness child
    ASL Info:    21/F/Michigan
    Elite Ratio:    3.07 - 195/266/48
    Words: 203
    Class/Type: Poetry/I am dead inside
    Total Views: 789
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 1396



    Description:
       This is pretty much about how I've changed over the past few years, and how I want to change back. I crave mindlessnes and the absence of thought. I wish I could regress....


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    dotsToday, I'll Be My Other Selfdots
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    Today, something within me broke,
    I felt the splinters stab inside.
    It may have been my heart,
    But then, why haven't I cried?

    This cold feeling of detachment,
    Like a shield between the pain.
    Separates me from reality,
    Numbs the hunger to be insane.

    Oh, but insanity is such bliss,
    With frenzied euphoric dreams.
    Silent haven of nothingness,
    Where I cannot hear my screams.

    I'm concealing the pain from myself,
    Locked up safe, and yet it expands.
    I feel it growing like it's alive,
    But no one outside understands.

    I remember my other self,
    Indifferent, reclusive, but free.
    She let lunacy run unchecked,
    Id forgotten what shes like to be.

    Hurry; lock me up inside the cage,
    Keep the hunger from breaking through.
    I fantasize about the bloodshed,
    And just maybe my dreams will come true.

    I cannot hold onto my sanity,
    And I wonder if I should even try.
    I miss the comfortable darkness,
    Thus, I bid you a sweet good-bye.

    I withdraw now into myself; heartsick,
    To an eerie, familiar state of being.
    I'm tired of hiding behind smiles,
    Today, it's myself that I am freeing.






    Submitted on 2006-10-02 19:51:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Thanks for making a good poem. Great expression. I like your rhymes. They seem effortless. I'ts okay to have the blues. Everyone now and then wants to throw away today's cares and replace them with happier times. But happier times come anyway and they're always better than those gone.
    | Posted on 2006-10-02 00:00:00 | by feather | [ Reply to This ]
      I'm awed by ur expressive feelings, I can relate to every lines you said, I felt that way at times and tho' i smiled outwardly yet i'm crying inside. You were able to touch others, the sign of a good writer. Keep sharing your thoughts... it's a good way to let out hidden emotions. Cheer up! life goes on inspite of the gloom.
    | Posted on 2006-10-02 00:00:00 | by chatters | [ Reply to This ]


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