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    Author: wildriver
    ASL Info:    18/Female/kearney, NE
    Elite Ratio:    1.84 - 13/12/12
    Words: 141
    Class/Type: Deep Thought/Love
    Total Views: 610
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 888



    Description:
       This is a story about how excited my fiance and i are to have kids some day


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    dotschildrendots
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    She looks like you,
    he laughs like me;
    its hard to describe
    why this was meant to be.

    Time passed by,
    and our dreams grew;
    how could i do this,
    with anyone but you?

    I wake each morning,
    and pray each night;
    I know this life God gave me
    has turned out just right.

    i can't wait to look
    into a mirror of your face,
    and know that our love
    this being creates.

    Hand in hand on a walk,
    no longer just us two;
    two other tiny hands
    now join me to you.

    The clouds no longer
    just linger above;
    the breezes will always
    calm like a dove.

    He giggles when the birds sing,
    she grins when she looks at you;
    you hold my hand so tight,
    because they are me and you




    Submitted on 2006-10-02 20:51:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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