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    dots Submission Name: Complicationsdots

    Author: Poetic Ways
    Elite Ratio:    1.31 - 9/24/26
    Words: 172
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    An attraction was made at first glance upon your eyes
    Worthiness is appearant so if I fail another attempt I shall try

    A hope of a chance allure me with such a great desire it's unreal
    Unexpected thoughts arise in my mind does she feel howI feel

    Admiring your beauty with nothing but amazing thoughts on my anxious mind
    But at the end of the night I'm suffocated with thoughts as to why I'm tryin

    I call it wishful thinking, When I strain my brain with thoughts of you
    A somber pain... the ink spills out my feelings yet i still know not what to do

    A sense of pointlessness in my desire of this little thing called fate
    Waste of time? Who knows but for some reason my heart says wait

    Sensational chills creep up my entire body when our eyes so briefly meet
    Your at the top of this hill... I struggle on my attempt to the top...But the hill seems to steep!

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