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Let Go


Author: Beseechingly
ASL Info:    23/F/USA
Elite Ratio:    1.63 - 1 /3 /12
Words: 117
Class/Type: Poetry /Depressed
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Let Go



I don't expect you to save me
but I wouldn't reject
a night spent in your arms
to make me feel more alive
you make it slightly less tempting
to let myself die
but I know lust for death would return
as soon as you left me and
every silent, protected beat of my heart
will mourn that loss
will regret the moment you let me go
and regret the moment I let you hold me
pretending all the while that
I am untouchable
that I prefer to be alone
that I don't mind being lonely
but you're so deep inside that
I hardly feel it when you touch me
only when you let go




Submitted on 2006-10-02 21:18:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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