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    dots Submission Name: Tapioca Puddingdots
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    Author: Beseechingly
    ASL Info:    23/F/USA
    Elite Ratio:    1.63 - 1/3/12
    Words: 77
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 709
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 568



    Description:
       Gasp, something with a clear format and capitalization. Just a funny little twisted romance peice, again from someone else's point of view, because romance is not part of my life.


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    dotsTapioca Puddingdots
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    I woke up today covered in,
    Dried tapioca pudding,
    And.
    A steadily growing sense of impending doom.

    My unspoken apology for each,
    Of your unspoken warnings,
    And.
    Those smiles that make me nauseous every time.

    But please give me a few more days,
    Before you bail out,
    And.
    Maybe we can pretend this mess never happened.



    The cleaning lady will be
    Pissed about the sheets,
    But.
    She probably wouldn't understand us, either.




    Submitted on 2006-10-02 21:29:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      That was funny and actually pretty thought provoking depending on how the reader decides to interpret it. A funny scenario comes to mind from that movie trainspotting. I dunno if you've seen it but if you have, the part where spud [censored] the bed! HAHAHA! Oh well I know that has nothing to do with the meaning of this piece but thanks for inspiring a funny snippet from a great movie.
    Take care
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    | Posted on 2007-01-04 00:00:00 | by fryte | [ Reply to This ]


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