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    dots Submission Name: The girldots
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    Author: Poetic Ways
    Elite Ratio:    1.31 - 9/24/26
    Words: 145
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    This girl like a witch casting her evil spell,
    Causing people pain and putting them thru hell,
    The devil in her comes out at times unexpected,
    It spits its poision into your heart her loves inefected,
    Afraid to get close yet afraid to fade away,
    She'll follow you where ever you go a demon here to stay,
    You try your best to push her out of your mind,
    Yet a way back in she is able to find,
    You try to push her out again it's an on going war,
    You wish it to be over you can't deal with it anymore,
    Praying to god wait! has my prayer been answered,
    This girl has infected my blood she is like a cancer,
    At last she is gone I have found the perfect cure,
    I've made my own poision a hatred that is so pure...




    Submitted on 2006-10-02 21:36:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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