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    dots Submission Name: Cost of My Souldots
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    Author: Soulraven
    ASL Info:    31/Male/Illinois
    Elite Ratio:    4.05 - 510/481/142
    Words: 66
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsCost of My Souldots
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    Youíre beloved to the world,
    Toes upon the ground paper flowers curled.
    Illuminating from corrupted society,
    Altar model my living piety.
    Your from an advanced genus,
    Take my mind offering me your Venus.
    We know each otherís flesh,
    Still your heartís armor remains intermeshed.
    My hearts obsessed,
    I am all alone while you transgress.
    I run toward your lost paradise,
    My soul an overpriced sacrifice.




    Submitted on 2004-01-27 22:41:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      lot of emotion, tough when you give all and the other doesn't
    | Posted on 2004-01-28 00:00:00 | by brokenbatman | [ Reply to This ]
      Nice, but I think in line 5 shouldn't it be "you're" (a contraction of you are")? Your is possessive.
    | Posted on 2004-01-28 00:00:00 | by cuddledumplin | [ Reply to This ]


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