Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: You Are Beautifuldots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: kiddo13
    ASL Info:    28/F/TN
    Elite Ratio:    5.28 - 70/61/22
    Words: 124
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 492
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 796



    Description:
       To my girls... keepers of my heart... my neverending joy... much love from mom!


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsYou Are Beautifuldots
    -------------------------------------------


    You are beautiful
    You are passionate
    You are strong and smart and sweet
    You have bright eyes
    and a killer smile
    You win everyone you meet
    You don't take 'no'
    and dear I know
    you will suffer your share of heartache
    But believe in yourself
    and hold tight to your dreams
    and never let anyone your light take

    For you are my angel
    My gift from God
    Worth more to me than all else
    You're special and pure
    and always be sure
    of the power you have in yourself

    The day will come
    when my job is done
    and you will go your own way
    But never forget
    you're as good as it gets
    and will always in my heart stay




    Submitted on 2006-10-03 11:24:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||
      this is a very warm an heartfelt piece. i bet your kids love it. it is a wonderful tribute to them and your amazing love for them. i love the dynamic instructions to offer them. the advice you give them to make it in life. the message is quite potent.

    there are some really nice rhymes here as well. in all i think that this write is certainly well written and most needed. it is written eloquently and takes on a whimsical nature as well.

    For you are my angel
    My gift from God
    Worth more to me than all else
    You're special and pure
    and always be sure
    of the power you have in yourself

    this is an incredible herald of love. i commend you on this lovely piece. superb job!!

    God bless you.
    john-paul
    | Posted on 2006-12-14 00:00:00 | by rev.jpfadeproof | [ Reply to This ]
      Nice maternal sentiments - but lacking in depth or complexity. While we all love our children - you could tell us what in particular your's do that really make you smile.
    THe particular details of how they are different from all the other mother's daughters - who also have "bright eyes
    and a killer smile".
    They are special - tell us how they are.
    | Posted on 2006-11-17 00:00:00 | by Beekeeper | [ Reply to This ]
      Lovely words, written from a loving mum. A mother's love for her children is probably the purest kind of love. An excellent write.

    Frank.
    | Posted on 2006-10-29 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
      Crystal,

    I like the feel of this. It is the kind of note you might slip into someon's lunch box to remind them of how special they are.

    Very personal, flows smoothly.

    Chrystine
    | Posted on 2006-10-04 00:00:00 | by beatthedrum | [ Reply to This ]
      Well it was a bit msuhy like when your mom uses spit to clean your face and your kind of grossed out and embarassed all at once. Overall I enjoyed the rhyme of of mine specialties and I thought it nicely carried the read from start to finish. Anyway not having any kids myself and frankly I still feel like one I can't relate to your roll, but it reminds me of my mom. i'm sure they feel embarrassed by you at time as i am by my mom but Undoubtly they love you.
    peace.
    | Posted on 2006-10-03 00:00:00 | by shaman | [ Reply to This ]


    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?



    120408

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.


    Google
     


    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry