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    dots Submission Name: Passingdots
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    Author: wildriver
    ASL Info:    18/Female/kearney, NE
    Elite Ratio:    1.84 - 13/12/12
    Words: 68
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    Description:
       this one can be taken so many different ways...what do you think?


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    dotsPassingdots
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    I watch silently
    as dust falls through the cracks;
    words defy me to describe
    why it acts like that.

    Waltzing, twirling,
    glittering, falling;
    all this time,
    I stand here stalling.

    Pass me by,
    my heart is slowing;
    seasonal creations
    to the ground are flowing.

    Once again in my head
    the old song is playing;
    to sleep I must go,
    for my Father is waiting.




    Submitted on 2006-10-03 14:07:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i think of Christmas.
    the 'Waltzing, twirling,
    glittering, falling;'
    is snow. the old song could be Jingle bells. and having to go to sleep, for father is waiting, would be father Christmas, waiting to deliver goodies to the kids.
    at least, that's what i get from this, i think the line 'seasonal creations' is a big factor!
    i like this, love the way you skip around actually naming a topic or subject, so i suppose many ppl would get different things from this. thats very clever.
    i don't know if 'pretty' is a word we can use to describe a poem, but i'm gonna, coz that's what i think this is....pretty.
    nice work,
    whirl**
    | Posted on 2006-10-03 00:00:00 | by whirl | [ Reply to This ]


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