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    Author: atonement
    Elite Ratio:    2.71 - 106/186/98
    Words: 64
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    Average Vote:    2.0000
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    you seem upset
    I'll just go away
    I don't want to stay anything
    because I know it will come back another day

    you seem sad,
    I'm scared to hold you
    because what happened last time,
    those bruises never did heal

    I love you in fear,
    I want to hold you
    I want to help you
    I want this to end




    Submitted on 2006-10-03 15:04:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i agree with what the other people said... its weird how you can love someone to death but be scared [censored]less of them at the same time... i like how you wrote it tho

    wonderful job

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    | Posted on 2007-02-16 00:00:00 | by Suicidalchild51 | [ Reply to This ]
      That is true that most effective emotions are fear and love. And its crazy that you can love someone and at the same time you fear them. But anyway this poem was very good and like i can read poems that i can relate to. you did a good job
    | Posted on 2006-10-04 00:00:00 | by Tash | [ Reply to This ]
      good the love of fear yeah i like that good keep it up it felt like me
    | Posted on 2006-10-04 00:00:00 | by kingsley | [ Reply to This ]
      Love and fear are the two most powerfull emotions imaginable. You captured this perfectly.

    Very well done.

    Frank.
    | Posted on 2006-10-03 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]


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