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    dots Submission Name: Dare of Lovedots
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    Author: wildriver
    ASL Info:    18/Female/kearney, NE
    Elite Ratio:    1.84 - 13/12/12
    Words: 59
    Class/Type: Poetry/Romance
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    dotsDare of Lovedots
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    Up high you hold me,
    the sun twinkles my eye;
    angels guide me
    while your love helps me fly.

    Lightning dances
    in a ballroom of black;
    alongside raindrops
    with diamond backs.

    I am awake,
    but in a dream;
    in a world that I believe.
    Take my hand.
    on a dare;
    go and see
    what I can share




    Submitted on 2006-10-03 17:24:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      omg i really love this! the lines "i am awake, but in a dream" are just so beautiful. i just wish your poem was a little longer, i enjoyed reading it, and didn't want to quit. very good work...
    </3 lisa
    | Posted on 2006-10-06 00:00:00 | by 777sacrites777 | [ Reply to This ]


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