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    dots Submission Name: Takendots
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    Author: wildriver
    ASL Info:    18/Female/kearney, NE
    Elite Ratio:    1.84 - 13/12/12
    Words: 62
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 565
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    Description:
       think of an old, old, man who never found love


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    dotsTakendots
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    Connected chains
    weakened by time;
    entangles by wind
    as if it's a crime.

    Briar bruised
    and bloody bitten;
    the heart is swollen
    from the words unwritten.

    Engraved in stone,
    worn by ages;
    no one may turn back
    the old faded pages.

    Worn withered hands
    grasping bits left of life;
    yell and fight
    til one takes up the knife




    Submitted on 2006-10-03 17:39:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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