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Author: shambolic
ASL Info:    19.Female.Mozchester
Elite Ratio:    1.92 - 10 /11 /15
Words: 53
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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I'm not the happiest of people in my new university setting.
Ugh. stupid room.


untitled



this room
this room is big and bright
and sunny look at the sun and smile
and see the cracks in the walls and the
cracks in the skin.
let me out, let me in, let me out, let me in.

this room.
only room and only space
solace&slumber
terror




Submitted on 2006-10-03 18:55:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  lol untitled poems always atrached my attension. but this was pretty good. i only wished that it was a little longer, not much longer but more so to show how much you really do hate the room. well thx for the read.

brandon
| Posted on 2006-10-03 00:00:00 | by disturbedx1000 | [ Reply to This ]
  Hey nice poem... You should try giving it a name tho
| Posted on 2006-10-03 00:00:00 | by Black-Death | [ Reply to This ]


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