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Night-Time Fantasy


Author: rememberplaydoh
Elite Ratio:    4.19 - 78 /103 /60
Words: 85
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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Night-Time Fantasy



Obsidian are the skies,
Night-time falls like dew.

Teary eyes are laid to rest,
Head, to blissful slumber;
Enchanted, dream-filled sleep.

Winds gently wrap around
In blanket-fashion, bringing warmth, as
Nectar from the stars
Graces lips with a kiss,
Soothing away all pain.

Opening slowly, a tender heart
Feels love's awakening touch.

All troubles dissolve for just one night.

Dreaming another hour,
Reveling in imagination,
Entertaining visions of love,
Again, lingering in a fantasy world;
Morning will come soon enough.




Submitted on 2006-10-04 09:25:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  ON THE WINGS OF A DREAM!!!! thats so COOL!!!!!!!!!!
| Posted on 2006-10-16 00:00:00 | by Moonshadow | [ Reply to This ]
  its good, i LOVE the imagry you use about the stars, it just seems like you could habe really run with it and you didn't. dont get me wrong hun, i love it, you have an amazing tallent with flow and stuff, but it seems cut off. If i were you i would expand on it. but what you have i really like. good write kid.
~Shadow
| Posted on 2006-10-05 00:00:00 | by Moonshadow | [ Reply to This ]
  i love it, alot.
going into my favorites.
its strange because its getting harder for me to choose favorites and i really like this one.
the way you ended it is perfect, completely.
i love this part:

Teary eyes are laid to rest,
Head, to blissful slumber;
Enchanted, dream-filled sleep

there is something about it.
i hope to read more soon.

-bleedingtears
| Posted on 2006-10-05 00:00:00 | by BleedingTears | [ Reply to This ]


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