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    dots Submission Name: Night-Time Fantasydots

    Author: rememberplaydoh
    Elite Ratio:    4.21 - 78/102/60
    Words: 85
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsNight-Time Fantasydots

    Obsidian are the skies,
    Night-time falls like dew.

    Teary eyes are laid to rest,
    Head, to blissful slumber;
    Enchanted, dream-filled sleep.

    Winds gently wrap around
    In blanket-fashion, bringing warmth, as
    Nectar from the stars
    Graces lips with a kiss,
    Soothing away all pain.

    Opening slowly, a tender heart
    Feels love's awakening touch.

    All troubles dissolve for just one night.

    Dreaming another hour,
    Reveling in imagination,
    Entertaining visions of love,
    Again, lingering in a fantasy world;
    Morning will come soon enough.

    Submitted on 2006-10-04 09:25:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      ON THE WINGS OF A DREAM!!!! thats so COOL!!!!!!!!!!
    | Posted on 2006-10-16 00:00:00 | by Moonshadow | [ Reply to This ]
      its good, i LOVE the imagry you use about the stars, it just seems like you could habe really run with it and you didn't. dont get me wrong hun, i love it, you have an amazing tallent with flow and stuff, but it seems cut off. If i were you i would expand on it. but what you have i really like. good write kid.
    | Posted on 2006-10-05 00:00:00 | by Moonshadow | [ Reply to This ]
      i love it, alot.
    going into my favorites.
    its strange because its getting harder for me to choose favorites and i really like this one.
    the way you ended it is perfect, completely.
    i love this part:

    Teary eyes are laid to rest,
    Head, to blissful slumber;
    Enchanted, dream-filled sleep

    there is something about it.
    i hope to read more soon.

    | Posted on 2006-10-05 00:00:00 | by BleedingTears | [ Reply to This ]

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