Description: A poem of entrapment. The first real shot of inspiration I've had in awhile. Thinking of flight that I can never have...because of commitments forced on me by those who love me but never ask.
Butterfly Under Glass -------------------------------------------
Thin gossamer wings
Beat against translucent force fields
Ripped and tattered
Never to fly again
On Broken delicate wings
Tears of sorrow
For the loss
Never to be regained
Of the poor destroyed Creature.
This, though short, is a wildly powerful poem. It seems that almost everyone, or anyone, at least to a greater or lesser extent can easily understand this poem and have empathy with it--marvelously concieved and and very well done... bravo ... bravo ... bravo ... michael
This is not my best day to be commenting (since everything seems so pointless) but I'll give it a try annyways. this poem contains such sadness, and yet there is someone who imprisoned this wonderful creature. there seems to be, between the lines, some great cruelty and or ignorance. the poem, to me, is about the shattering of beauty yet described in a way you don't always see. I like it, I love wonderful words and beauty. and I can't seem to figure out why sadness and pain alway gets my focus. //The Littel Good Wolf
A very expressive (painfully short) piece of work.
What does it tell me and how does it speak to me?
It tells me that an individual has had many dreams to succeed in some particular area only to be thwarted by authority. " Thin gossamer wings Beat against transluscent force feilds" (I would edit the spelling of fields)
It says to me that this individual has given up on that hope of success and that this is a dream that can never be realised.
"Tears of sorrow For the loss Never to be regained"
I would have loved it if you had continued along in this vein with even more descriptive prose about what potentially might have been possible in the future for this individual.
"The winsome wings they flew but briefly Tempting and hopeful of heights regretably never reached" etc
Thats just me playing with your theme. Take no notice, I like what you wrote I just would have loved to see and read more of it in this particular piece.