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Trust me


Author: LocketzVC
ASL Info:    18/F/pa
Elite Ratio:    2.18 - 12 /42 /18
Words: 57
Class/Type: Poetry /Serious
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Average Vote:    4.0000
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I was reading a great book, one that dealt with trust and honesty issuses and this little piece came to me because of that


Trust me



If you trust me
Then believe in me

If you believe in me
Then work beside me

If you work beside me
Then be my friend

If you are my friend
Then you have my loyality

If you have my loyality
You have my trust

I trust you
Do you trust me?




Submitted on 2006-10-04 13:50:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This is good. And yeah, I liked how you connected the sentences together like that. Great idea for a poem. It's so funny though, because I was just reading something about trust online, and then I came here and found this.

Nice work.

~Piper
| Posted on 2006-10-13 00:00:00 | by PiperH | [ Reply to This ]
  umm, Grammar! thats about the worst part of the commetn im gonna give.

i like the idea, and how each line tottaly goes together.

good write, good idea!!

great Format
xox
| Posted on 2006-10-04 00:00:00 | by crazzybeautiful | [ Reply to This ]
  Hmmm.... interesting. This is a very important message. It is important that we learn who we should trust and why we should trust them.
There are a couple of typos (or I assume they are typos). On the first two lines you wrote 'the' instead of 'then'. If you meant 'the' that's fine too, just thought I would inform you. Perhaps you should try making it a little more complicated by adding some descriptive words in there.
Nicely written.
The Conqueror
| Posted on 2006-10-04 00:00:00 | by The Conqueror | [ Reply to This ]
  isnt it funny how when your reading you can come up with some great ideas? Anywayway I liked this poem alot!
Kelley Frost
| Posted on 2006-10-04 00:00:00 | by whendt | [ Reply to This ]
  isnt it funny how when your reading you can come up with some great ideas? Anywayway I liked this poem alot!
Kelley Frost
| Posted on 2006-10-04 00:00:00 | by whendt | [ Reply to This ]
  isnt it funny how when your reading you can come up with some great ideas? Anywayway I liked this poem alot!
Kelley Frost
| Posted on 2006-10-04 00:00:00 | by whendt | [ Reply to This ]
  isnt it funny how when your reading you can come up with some great ideas? Anywayway I liked this poem alot!
Kelley Frost
| Posted on 2006-10-04 00:00:00 | by whendt | [ Reply to This ]
  isnt it funny how when your reading you can come up with some great ideas? Anywayway I liked this poem alot!
Kelley Frost
| Posted on 2006-10-04 00:00:00 | by whendt | [ Reply to This ]
  isnt it funny how when your reading you can come up with some great ideas? Anywayway I liked this poem alot!
Kelley Frost
| Posted on 2006-10-04 00:00:00 | by whendt | [ Reply to This ]
  isnt it funny how when your reading you can come up with some great ideas? Anywayway I liked this poem alot!
Kelley Frost
| Posted on 2006-10-04 00:00:00 | by whendt | [ Reply to This ]


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