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    dots Submission Name: **EVERYDAYdots
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    Author: Caotic_Disaster
    ASL Info:    16/F/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    4.03 - 447/349/148
    Words: 56
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 512
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 429



    Description:
       This isn't one of my better ones. It is very different from anything else I have written that's why I posted it. Enjoy.


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    dots**EVERYDAYdots
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    DRIP DROP
    TICK TOCH
    THE SOUNDS OF A LONELY HOUSE ECHOS
    CLICK CLOP
    BANG BOOM
    THE UPSTAIRS INHABITANTS COME ALIVE
    ACHO
    BLESS YOU
    A WICKED COLD ESCAPES TO THE ATMOSPHERE
    HONK HONK
    BEEP BEEP
    THE ROARING TRAFFIC SPEAKS
    WOOF BARK
    MEOW HISS
    A WILD STREET FIGHT EMERGES
    SQUEAK SQUEAK
    SLAM BAM
    AN OLD RUSTED DOOR ABUSED




    Submitted on 2006-10-04 14:12:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I get a feeling of much eeriness (is that a word-I don't think so, but I hope you get my point). Like I should be loooking over my shoulder to make sure the dude in the trench coat isn't following me, ecept when I look back: he's no longer there--ok, so that was a really bad parellel, I shouldn't read poetry while I'm still tired. But it holds much creepiness. And in line two did you mean tick tock?
    | Posted on 2006-10-05 00:00:00 | by orange | [ Reply to This ]


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