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    dots Submission Name: **Heaven's Tearsdots

    Author: Caotic_Disaster
    ASL Info:    16/F/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    4.03 - 447/349/148
    Words: 82
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nature
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       I wrote this during English class. It was pouring and my desk is facing the window so I was looking out the window into the pouring rain. It was thunderstorming so ya. Enjoy.

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    dots**Heaven's Tearsdots

    Tears pouring from the Heavens
    Draping the land in grey
    Fogging my vision
    From the trees ahead
    Cleaning my pale white skin
    The peachy worms
    Stick out their heads
    To absorb the tear drops
    Falling to Hell
    A piercing light
    Fills the falling sky
    As a wave like boom
    Clasps the fear in so many
    The fast falling fury
    Leaves in a flash
    Abandoning the residue
    AS a mark of the past
    Until once again
    Heaven's tears shall fall.

    Submitted on 2006-10-04 14:18:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      ... A lot of people write a lot of poems in English class, don't they? Which is really very ironic, if you think about it. Because instead of *learning* about proper literature, we're making our own. Now, I'm not saying that I'm not guilty of this...

    We're having monsoon season here, too. I'm going to throw a printed version of a poem of mine and casting it into the wind if ever a storm blows nigh. If fate should allow it, it'll fly into a publisher's hands.

    At any rate, dear Ermengarde, as much as I enjoyed the poem, I could not shake the strange feelings I had for "peachy worms". ... It brings ... umm... very creepy crawlies to mind. To *my* mind, that is.

    This isn't really critique. I'm only babbling.

    Yours truly,
    | Posted on 2006-10-07 00:00:00 | by Lacrimosa | [ Reply to This ]
      Really great poem I have heard it said many times that of course rain is like HEAVENS TEARS but this poem really through all thoughts and mentions of a clichégo out the door

    Tears pouring from the Heavens
    Draping the land in grey
    Fogging my vision
    From the trees ahead
    ...................> I like this alot the way you put it in your perspective for us the readers made it all the more beautiful

    This is a great writing and ya know I think that I will add this to my favs :)

    much LOVE
    | Posted on 2006-10-05 00:00:00 | by James Reyna | [ Reply to This ]
      This is perfect
    As I have told you before I Love the Rain and you expressed one of the best reasons why with this write
    To me the rain washes away all the negativity and sadness built up inside of me and leaves me refreshed and reborn with new spirit and new mind
    Excellent Job
    I can see with each new write of yours a marked improvement since The first write of yours I read
    Keep writing as it helps heal
    I Love the emotion put into this write
    very descriptive
    God Bless
    Your Friend
    | Posted on 2006-10-04 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      It rains alot where I live as well, the grey sky, the fog, the steady drum of endless rain... I love it...
    | Posted on 2006-10-04 00:00:00 | by Nihilist Weasel | [ Reply to This ]
      isn't it amazing what a rainstorm can inspire?
    this is nice, great use of descriptive words, like peachy worms (love that!!).
    i think this a lovely poem. just telling of exactly what you see creates a vision in the readers mind, which is what we all strive to do.
    good job,
    | Posted on 2006-10-04 00:00:00 | by whirl | [ Reply to This ]

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