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    dots Submission Name: Untill In The Light I Walk Againdots

    Author: Noah
    ASL Info:    40/M/Iraq
    Elite Ratio:    3.14 - 26/44/8
    Words: 172
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotsUntill In The Light I Walk Againdots

    I’m falling…..

    Jagged memories tear at my skin as I descend

    My soul comes to violent rest, the wind knocked from it

    I reach for a familiar hand into nothingness, beads of sweat roll from my fingers


    My ear to the cold floor….listen…

    Nothing, but the sound of my own breath and heart

    The rapture of my being…now lost

    Torment in peace, my own voice the only comfort

    Trapped here in the womb of lonesomeness

    But to throw off this shadowy cloak which fails to soothe

    And run unhindered, down the path to home

    Harmony my companion as I feast at the table of affection

    To converse with the angels of tranquility

    And mend my tired and battered soul

    Compassion and caring at my side

    My brow wiped clean by love’s hand

    This is the intimate friend I search for in the murkiness

    Until in the light I walk again

    Submitted on 2006-10-04 14:18:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      "Who never ate his bread in sorrow,
    Who never spent the midnight hours,
    Weeping, waiting for the morrow,
    He knows ye not, ye heavenly powers."

    --from Goethe's Faust
    | Posted on 2006-10-12 00:00:00 | by Keats | [ Reply to This ]

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