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    dots Submission Name: I Am Done With Youdots

    Author: disturbedx1000
    ASL Info:    28/m/ny
    Elite Ratio:    3.67 - 204/326/124
    Words: 146
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Venting
    Total Views: 810
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       after a long walk in the rain and recent events, i came up with yet another song i love. well i hope you enjoy this as much as i did writing it.

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    dotsI Am Done With Youdots

    take me tonight...
    bring upon my soul and trebble,
    for fear there is no saving me,

    sacrafice thy self...
    no more excuses you want me to believe,
    i am done with you...


    done with every-thing,
    it's gona have to-change,
    everyone is the-same,
    i can't seem to es-cape,

    i am done with you...
    i am done with you...

    please just get a-way,
    i'm sick of every-thing,
    i can't take it no-more,
    i am done with-you,

    GO! (echo X3 fading)
    LEAVE! (echo X3 fading)
    ME! (echo X3 fading)
    BE! (hold out)

    please just get a-way,
    i'm sick of every-thing,
    i can't take it no-more,
    i am done with-you,

    i am done with you...
    are you done with me...
    i am done with you...

    I AM DONE... WITH YOU!!!

    Submitted on 2006-10-04 17:48:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like it in the shortness of it but i also think that there should be more of a verse because they all kinda sound like chorus'. It's good and i like it i also agree with Briannan it would be better to hear it and then pass judgement on it
    ~ Ms. Understood
    | Posted on 2008-01-12 00:00:00 | by Rehian | [ Reply to This ]
      i like this. it seems like it would be a fast paced song with a great guitar riff. as always I wish I could hear it.
    | Posted on 2006-10-05 00:00:00 | by Briannan | [ Reply to This ]
      i like ittttt
    | Posted on 2006-10-04 00:00:00 | by BrOkEn4gOoD | [ Reply to This ]

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