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    dots Submission Name: I Am Done With Youdots
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    Author: disturbedx1000
    ASL Info:    28/m/ny
    Elite Ratio:    3.67 - 204/326/124
    Words: 146
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Venting
    Total Views: 773
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1023



    Description:
       after a long walk in the rain and recent events, i came up with yet another song i love. well i hope you enjoy this as much as i did writing it.


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    dotsI Am Done With Youdots
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    take me tonight...
    bring upon my soul and trebble,
    for fear there is no saving me,

    sacrafice thy self...
    no more excuses you want me to believe,
    i am done with you...

    I AM DONE WITH YOU!!!

    done with every-thing,
    it's gona have to-change,
    everyone is the-same,
    i can't seem to es-cape,

    i am done with you...
    i am done with you...
    I AM DONE WITH YOU!!!

    please just get a-way,
    i'm sick of every-thing,
    i can't take it no-more,
    i am done with-you,

    GO! (echo X3 fading)
    LEAVE! (echo X3 fading)
    ME! (echo X3 fading)
    BE! (hold out)

    please just get a-way,
    i'm sick of every-thing,
    i can't take it no-more,
    i am done with-you,

    i am done with you...
    are you done with me...
    i am done with you...

    I AM DONE... WITH YOU!!!




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    ||| Comments |||
      I like it in the shortness of it but i also think that there should be more of a verse because they all kinda sound like chorus'. It's good and i like it i also agree with Briannan it would be better to hear it and then pass judgement on it
    thanx,
    ~ Ms. Understood
    | Posted on 2008-01-12 00:00:00 | by Rehian | [ Reply to This ]
      i like this. it seems like it would be a fast paced song with a great guitar riff. as always I wish I could hear it.
    Briannan
    | Posted on 2006-10-05 00:00:00 | by Briannan | [ Reply to This ]
      i like ittttt
    | Posted on 2006-10-04 00:00:00 | by BrOkEn4gOoD | [ Reply to This ]


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