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    dots Submission Name: Deeper Stilldots
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    Author: uconnfan1972
    ASL Info:    31/M/CA
    Elite Ratio:    2.94 - 8/12/5
    Words: 68
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nostalgia
    Total Views: 1438
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    Bytes: 506



    Description:
       I wrote this while reflecting on my most recent [failed] relationship. I like this one, despite overusage of dot-dot-dot's, I feel that it is palletably short and sweet.


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    dotsDeeper Stilldots
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    Depth, the perception of which leads me deeper still;
    into memories, thoughts, emotions...
    ...of devotions and love potions.
    Notions of love-lore and wanting more;
    feeling about myself as a bore.
    Certainly reality cannot be so harsh,
    yet through this boggy marsh I trudge.
    The sludge of my decadence is ther precedence.
    An open heart gets wounded...
    ...or broken...
    ...shattered...
    tattered fragments of you and of those before.




    Submitted on 2004-05-24 23:01:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i freaking loved this. i love when people can do the internal-rhyme thingy and it turns out sounding great. the whole philsophical approach in this piece is excellent. great write. can't wait to see more.
    | Posted on 2004-05-24 00:00:00 | by mallyland | [ Reply to This ]


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