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    dots Submission Name: Butterflydots
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    Author: wildriver
    ASL Info:    18/Female/kearney, NE
    Elite Ratio:    1.84 - 13/12/12
    Words: 99
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 558
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 618



    Description:
       Hmmm, if i had a description, you may not understand anyway :)


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    dotsButterflydots
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    Where will I go today,
    what pain will I see?
    I watch what you do,
    but you ignore me.

    I pass by
    unnoticed, again;
    the question is not
    why I'm here,
    and the answer is not when.

    You will not find me,
    because I am not here;
    I was with you once
    and you had no fear.

    Chances are taken,
    and hopes feebly tossed;
    to the moon and back,
    for my love was lost.

    Wings of dazzle
    sink without control;
    only you can lift me
    from my light forsaken hole.




    Submitted on 2006-10-04 19:03:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      That's so pretty.
    As sad as it is, it seemed to have a big sparkly cloud around it.
    I don't know if that makes any sense... but I really enjoyed this.
    I like the butterfly metaphor.
    Although I am terrified of butterflies, they are very pretty. lol

    Wonderfully done
    -nikkki
    | Posted on 2006-10-09 00:00:00 | by Liv2LoveThePain | [ Reply to This ]


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