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Submission Name: Butterfly dots

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Author:	wildriver
ASL Info:	18/Female/kearney, NE
Elite Ratio:	1.84 - 13/12/12
Words:	99

Class/Type:	Poetry/Longing
Total Views:	690
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	618

Description:
Hmmm, if i had a description, you may not understand anyway :)

Butterfly dots

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Where will I go today,
what pain will I see?
I watch what you do,
but you ignore me.

I pass by
unnoticed, again;
the question is not
why I'm here,
and the answer is not when.

You will not find me,
because I am not here;
I was with you once
and you had no fear.

Chances are taken,
and hopes feebly tossed;
to the moon and back,
for my love was lost.

Wings of dazzle
sink without control;
only you can lift me
from my light forsaken hole.

Submitted on 2006-10-04 19:03:20 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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||| Comments |||
That's so pretty.
As sad as it is, it seemed to have a big sparkly cloud around it.
I don't know if that makes any sense... but I really enjoyed this.
I like the butterfly metaphor.
Although I am terrified of butterflies, they are very pretty. lol

Wonderfully done
-nikkki
| Posted on 2006-10-09 00:00:00 | by Liv2LoveThePain | [ Reply to This ]

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Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3 It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
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