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Submission Name: Hand in Hand. dots

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Author:	obsidiandreams
ASL Info:	29/M/Canada
Elite Ratio:	3.53 - 169/212/105
Words:	55

Class/Type:	Poetry/Serious
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Hand in Hand. dots

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A murderer, A loving man
Who walks these fields
Hand in hand;

A racist, A soldier
Who walks this land
Gun to bullet,
Hand in hand;

A vision, A dream
That slowly creeps
Song to Voice
Killers weep;

A plague, A cure
That makes us clean
Trust to devils
Sets us free;

Submitted on 2006-10-04 19:25:08 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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This was SO f.ucking awesome; god, hun now I actually do feel bad about not commenting yesterday:P As deeply as it pains me to agree with Ron, this did make me think of Iraq. not to rant but I think Ron flagging his opinion around in such a way is extremely arrogant (and I could care less if you refer him to this page or not) because he believes so strongly that 'every man was created equally' but he refuses to believe that they are all capable of equal sin.....regardless of the intention behind the actions; some are still dead, someone has still lost a father/mother/sister/loved one etc. and how can you justify that? how can you walk up to someone so innocent and try to explain that you took part of their life away for some 'greater good'? and honestly, how can any idiot say/ truly believe that peace is a product of war? that's so [censored] counterproductive and contradicting it seriously disgusts me.
anyway...good write lol got me thinking
<3 take care,
~jess
| Posted on 2006-10-08 00:00:00 | by silent_death12 | [ Reply to This ]
This is a write in which I believe you are displaying your distaste with the war in Iraq
I believe you are saying that a man with a gun be it a murderer a thief or a milatary man are all the same
I respectively dont agree with that opinion but I do emjoy the way you put this write together
The way you broke this write down into 4 strong stazas is very clever
The only thing I would say i=s if I am write about the theme of this poem I wish you would explain why you feel that way
God Bless
Ron

Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
I just added 2 new writes
Thank You
Ron
| Posted on 2006-10-04 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]

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