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    dots Submission Name: seduce me o sweet deathdots
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    Author: blackhart
    ASL Info:    26 male
    Elite Ratio:    2.77 - 65/63/56
    Words: 91
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    seduce me o sweet death
    caress my chest and shoulders
    let me feel the blade you hold
    your cloak has raptured my breath
    astonishing my senses full
    i have no remorse
    just a longing for your sweet embrace
    theres a procession
    chanting and whirling
    joyfully expressing all terror
    this black parade
    touches my lips with your smile
    a smile that has been absent far too long
    o sweet death
    let me feel you once again
    lock me into your bosom
    ill never try to escape




    Submitted on 2006-10-04 19:26:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I absolutly adore this. You speek of death as if it were a woman.(Any special reason why?) Please read any of my poems that you may find interesting...kind words only....ignorance is never needed. Wonderful work on this peice.
    Dominique
    | Posted on 2006-10-04 00:00:00 | by DearlyDeparted | [ Reply to This ]


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