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    dots Submission Name: For Thosedots
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    Author: Latin King
    ASL Info:    31/M/Los Angeles
    Elite Ratio:    2.39 - 104/232/145
    Words: 63
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 596
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       Something I was feeling.


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    dotsFor Thosedots
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    It came to me one day,
    That I had one thing I didn't give away,
    My life's potential
    Expanded beyond the horizons
    Nowadays my life's just mental
    And It seems that my life's credentials
    Are devoured by my inscissors.
    How complicated can it get,
    When all we do is cry
    For those who we won't forget,
    And for those who forget to try.




    Submitted on 2006-10-04 20:06:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow. This is short but it has a strong message and it made me think...I'm from South Africa and as in many countries all over, there are a lot of young people here who don't use their potential and mess up their lives with drugs and gangsterism etc.
    From what I picked up from the first four lines it sounds like you're not one of those people but after that the message changed..?
    Everyone has issues and problems some time in their lives but just don't give up no matter how hectic it gets...peace and love
    Foxy lee
    | Posted on 2006-10-05 00:00:00 | by foxy lee | [ Reply to This ]


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