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Submission Name: For Those dots

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Author:	Latin King
ASL Info:	31/M/Los Angeles
Elite Ratio:	2.39 - 104/232/145
Words:	63

Class/Type:	Poetry/Serious
Total Views:	555
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	423

Description:
Something I was feeling.

For Those dots

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It came to me one day,
That I had one thing I didn't give away,
My life's potential
Expanded beyond the horizons
Nowadays my life's just mental
And It seems that my life's credentials
Are devoured by my inscissors.
How complicated can it get,
When all we do is cry
For those who we won't forget,
And for those who forget to try.

Submitted on 2006-10-04 20:06:54 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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Wow. This is short but it has a strong message and it made me think...I'm from South Africa and as in many countries all over, there are a lot of young people here who don't use their potential and mess up their lives with drugs and gangsterism etc.
From what I picked up from the first four lines it sounds like you're not one of those people but after that the message changed..?
Everyone has issues and problems some time in their lives but just don't give up no matter how hectic it gets...peace and love
Foxy lee
| Posted on 2006-10-05 00:00:00 | by foxy lee | [ Reply to This ]

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It means a lot to them, as it does to you.