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Wishes From An Ex-Lover

Author: bloodydreamer27
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I wrote this about my ex boyfriend Mike cause he's a complete dick head. It's not that good but tell me what you think

Wishes From An Ex-Lover

Your a lier, I hate you, and I wish you would die,
I hope she breaks your heart and makes you cry.
I wish I could torture you until you scream,
But I can't so i'll just haunt you in your dreams.
You'll go insane with anger, hatred, and rage,
And from that moment on you'll be deranged.

I wish I could make her cheat on you,
To show you what damage that can do.
Show you how much pain it can cause,
So maybe next time you'll pause.
If all my wishes came ture you'd b dead inside,
And from then on in no one would you confide.

Submitted on 2006-10-04 20:28:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  get over it god damn
| Posted on 2006-10-05 00:00:00 | by skullreaperX_X | [ Reply to This ]
  YES! lol I love the hatred I feel comming from this poem. I have an idea of what this is about. Acctualy you made it quite clear in the title. I really like it though

| Posted on 2006-10-05 00:00:00 | by Mr. Creep | [ Reply to This ]
  This was awesome. A bit scratchy though. It kind flowed weirdly. But it was good. You must really hate that guy.
| Posted on 2006-10-07 00:00:00 | by hellsangel | [ Reply to This ]

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