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    dots Submission Name: Heaven's Handdots
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    Author: BahamutZer0
    ASL Info:    22 / Male / Wi, USA
    Elite Ratio:    2.65 - 14/21/11
    Words: 131
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsHeaven's Handdots
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    Why don't you just go with it?

    Life isn't that hard.

    But it is so when you can't tell the difference between right and wrong.

    You can have your feet on the dashboard, or you can have your feet on the mat that was meant for it.

    You can see something and turn it upside down,
    but your heart picks it up and turns it around again.

    Heaven's got a little something for you if you pick the mat,

    and heaven's got a little something for you if you put your feet on the dash.

    and heaven's got a little something for you if you flip people upside down.

    Any way you choose, you'll get there.
    Just a matter of time.




    Submitted on 2004-05-24 23:07:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this is something just past whimsical, but eons before clichéd. taking an idea as simple as the way a person sits in a vehicle and using it as a metaphor for the way one lives life... and then building on that metaphor with imagery and illusion and Allusion... very very sweet.

    bruno is an angry boy. but i love him. somewhat. and i doubt that someone that uses that many exclamation marks really thinks life 'sux' that badly. (sidenote to everyone reading this, i will smack him the next time i see him for using short hand on a literatical (yes i made that up) haven such as this.

    i desist. back to you. it's hopeful which is the main reason i like it.... but there's also acceptance within your words... acceptance that is difficult to find in our world.

    :)
    | Posted on 2004-05-25 00:00:00 | by freeradical | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this. Its sort of opposite to my writings, you're saying you'll get there no matter how just keep living your life...I usually say give up to hell with this sux. Good write though!!
    | Posted on 2004-05-24 00:00:00 | by brunov68 | [ Reply to This ]


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