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    dots Submission Name: Murdererdots
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    Author: (Eagle)
    ASL Info:    14/m/OH
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 31/25/11
    Words: 38
    Class/Type: Poetry/Death
    Total Views: 826
    Average Vote:    4.5000
    Bytes: 248



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    dotsMurdererdots
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    A knife in his left hand.
    Your lifeless body in his right.
    And blood flowing upon his fingers.
    In The Darkness of the Night.
    A family Ruined, a life Lost.
    Into the Darkness.
    Souls he tossed.





    Submitted on 2006-10-04 20:33:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Short. Direct. No roundabouts.
    Nice.
    Azuire
    | Posted on 2006-10-22 00:00:00 | by Azuire | [ Reply to This ]
      This is one of the most amazing pieces i have ever read. So much power went into so little of lines, I loved it. Write on.
    | Posted on 2006-10-05 00:00:00 | by FailureXX | [ Reply to This ]
      Isn't that what a murderer does? A disposer of souls. This is wonderful. It's short and sharp which gives it a sadistic flavor.
    | Posted on 2006-10-04 00:00:00 | by LovelyGoddess | [ Reply to This ]
      Indeed, quite short but dark and viscious.

    You may enjoy a couple of my stories, they share a few common factors

    http://www.eliteskills.com/u/Nihilist%20Weasel
    | Posted on 2006-10-04 00:00:00 | by Nihilist Weasel | [ Reply to This ]
      You know... that's not even half bad. Given of course that it's a bit short for my tastes, and you have a few unnecessary words... it's still a good shot. You're writing better things than people two years older than you that I've seen. Keep it up and you'll be somewhere in no time, I bet. I also liked the abstract thought here, rather than completely concrete diction.

    In any case.


    Good Job Steven!

    Austin
    | Posted on 2006-10-04 00:00:00 | by Fade ElBrunen | [ Reply to This ]


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