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    dots Submission Name: Symphony of Confusiondots
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    Author: Ayane
    ASL Info:    17/F/IL
    Elite Ratio:    2.75 - 71/128/60
    Words: 200
    Class/Type: Poetry/BrokenHeart
    Total Views: 1003
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    Bytes: 1324



    Description:
       I guess I just wrote this to kinda get the thought out of my head. All of that built up confusion has cause one of the worst maigraines I've had in a long time....bleh


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    dotsSymphony of Confusiondots
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    So what have we done
    My long lost friend?
    Our time has been fun
    But now it's the end
    The charade is over
    We're going to lose
    Why be surprised?
    This is old news
    It's just too hard
    To stay in the game
    Lost in these lies
    Forgetting our names
    There was no point
    Our friends getting hurt
    And now we are hated
    We're lower than dirt
    So it's time that we end this
    On our final day
    I can stand this no longer
    I quit from this play

    Where does your heart lie?
    With them or with me?
    It's breaking my heart
    Why can't you just see?
    I've been here forever
    Waiting for you
    My real feelings concealed
    What I confessed was true
    So I'll wait here forever
    You're my light from above
    I guess to put it bluntly
    That "like" has turned to "love"
    Do what you must
    To make things right
    But please don't forget me
    Don't take away my light

    So this is my plea
    My ever beloved friend
    Don't leave me here alone
    Please don't call this the end






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      wow, it flows, i can almost see in my mind whats happining...... very cool.
    sry bout ur migarain...i get those alot, sometimes writing is the only way to get them to go away.

    Isabella
    | Posted on 2007-02-07 00:00:00 | by IsabellaAurora | [ Reply to This ]
      It's a poem I can really relate to. I wonder if you ever got over the "confusion"... In or out the game? (If you are as obsessed as myself... the game never really ends until YOU win ;)

    My first fav around here.
    | Posted on 2006-10-05 00:00:00 | by Non-Sens-Uality | [ Reply to This ]
      It's a poem I can really relate to. I wonder if you ever got over the "confusion"... In or out the game? (If you are as obsessed as myself... the game never really ends until YOU win ;)

    My first fav around here.
    | Posted on 2006-10-05 00:00:00 | by Non-Sens-Uality | [ Reply to This ]
      It's a poem I can really relate to. I wonder if you ever got over the "confusion"... In or out the game? (If you are as obsessed as myself... the game never really ends until YOU win ;)

    My first fav around here.
    | Posted on 2006-10-05 00:00:00 | by Non-Sens-Uality | [ Reply to This ]
      It's a poem I can really relate to. I wonder if you ever got over the "confusion"... In or out the game? (If you are as obsessed as myself... the game never really ends until YOU win ;)

    My first fav around here.
    | Posted on 2006-10-05 00:00:00 | by Non-Sens-Uality | [ Reply to This ]
      It's a poem I can really relate to. I wonder if you ever got over the "confusion"... In or out the game? (If you are as obsessed as myself... the game never really ends until YOU win ;)

    My first fav around here.
    | Posted on 2006-10-05 00:00:00 | by Non-Sens-Uality | [ Reply to This ]
      It's a poem I can really relate to. I wonder if you ever got over the "confusion"... In or out the game? (If you are as obsessed as myself... the game never really ends until YOU win ;)

    My first fav around here.
    | Posted on 2006-10-05 00:00:00 | by Non-Sens-Uality | [ Reply to This ]
      It's a poem I can really relate to. I wonder if you ever got over the "confusion"... In or out the game? (If you are as obsessed as myself... the game never really ends until YOU win ;)

    My first fav around here.
    | Posted on 2006-10-05 00:00:00 | by Non-Sens-Uality | [ Reply to This ]
      It's a poem I can really relate to. I wonder if you ever got over the "confusion"... In or out the game? (If you are as obsessed as myself... the game never really ends until YOU win ;)

    My first fav around here.
    | Posted on 2006-10-05 00:00:00 | by Non-Sens-Uality | [ Reply to This ]
      It's a poem I can really relate to. I wonder if you ever got over the "confusion"... In or out the game? (If you are as obsessed as myself... the game never really ends until YOU win ;)

    My first fav around here.
    | Posted on 2006-10-05 00:00:00 | by Non-Sens-Uality | [ Reply to This ]
      It's a poem I can really relate to. I wonder if you ever got over the "confusion"... In or out the game? (If you are as obsessed as myself... the game never really ends until YOU win ;)

    My first fav around here.
    | Posted on 2006-10-05 00:00:00 | by Non-Sens-Uality | [ Reply to This ]


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