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    dots Submission Name: Perfectdots
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    Author: AngelinDisguise
    ASL Info:    23/F/AUS
    Elite Ratio:    2.23 - 133/171/100
    Words: 111
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 896
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 610



    Description:
       Alot Of The Stuff I Write Dont Make Much Sense But Ohwell


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    dotsPerfectdots
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    Youíre just so perfect why you canít see
    Look at what youíve done to me
    Youíve made me laugh made me smile
    With the look thatís in your eyes
    But you just donít realise
    Just how much you mean to me
    How important you are in my life
    Each night before I go to sleep
    I make just one wish and that
    Is for you to be here with me
    I wonder if he feels the same way
    I wonder if we could ever be together
    Then I could get my one true kiss
    But at the moment itís just a dream
    Because I know he doesnít feel like this




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    ||| Comments |||
      awesum write i like it its one of my favs xoxo luv ya keep up the great work ;)
    | Posted on 2006-10-05 00:00:00 | by brokenbylove | [ Reply to This ]
      this makes sense to me ^.^ unrequited love.
    "I wonder if he feels the same way
    I wonder if we could ever be together" I find myself thinking these very thoughts.
    | Posted on 2006-10-04 00:00:00 | by LovelyGoddess | [ Reply to This ]
      I like the flow to it, the subject matter is very honest. I think we've all asked these questions before. Wished that wish at least one time before. Lucky are we that it's come true for.
    | Posted on 2006-10-04 00:00:00 | by Nihilist Weasel | [ Reply to This ]
      honest, open and heartfelt, but while it started out with a good flow and beat, both of them sort of faded....
    keep trying, i'm sure you have amazing potential

    xoxo
    | Posted on 2006-10-06 00:00:00 | by blu_kittin | [ Reply to This ]


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