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    dots Submission Name: This Liedots
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    Author: Hip-Hop Honey
    ASL Info:    16/f/canada
    Elite Ratio:    3.51 - 105/86/31
    Words: 120
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    Description:
       This is a poem I wrote awhile ago..I know see the meaning of this poem at different perspectives..I just want to know what you think of it


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    dotsThis Liedots
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    Trying so hard to get my mind
    Off that horrible lie
    That seems to keep consuming me with time
    It's all about how you turn to me and say goodbye
    You look straight into my eyes
    Take me by suprise
    By you telling me this love has died
    That's when I scream "You Lie"
    As a tear falls from my eye
    What a crazy thought I know
    All this coming from deep below
    Maybe it's just me and my emotions
    Just going insane
    I bet it's from missing you so much each day
    But it's time for me to stop worrying of such things
    Put a smile on my face
    And wait for what tomorrow has to bring




    Submitted on 2006-10-04 21:04:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Oh my goodness this is so good! At first I thought man, another sad poem about being dumped, but yours shows that there is always a way to get over it, and it is so strong of you!!
    LOVE IT!
    | Posted on 2006-10-06 00:00:00 | by steffunni | [ Reply to This ]


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