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I Hope You Bled Tears


Author: Jingles
ASL Info:    19.m.canada
Elite Ratio:    2.08 - 18 /60 /36
Words: 157
Class/Type: Lyrics /Angry
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A song I wrote, Let me know what you think.My friends gonna use it in his band.


I Hope You Bled Tears



This is my wasted life
And I can't wait till it's over
So bury me alive
Cause I wrote this threat to you
My pain has no end
It's killing me inside

Let's wait, for this day to come slowly
You can't wait, to be broken hearted
Like torture, you stand here, and stare
At your name, engraved in the wall

Well I hope you bled, tears on Valentine's Day
Like a bullet through your heart

The last thing you heard
A rejection in your mind
I'll laugh at your funeral
I stayed up all night, thinking of you cry
Am I just wasting my time?

Well I hope you bled, tears on Valentine's Day
Like a bullet through your heart

Is this real, or am I just going insane?
I feel so unpredictable

Well I hope you bled, tears on Valentine's Day
Like a bullet through your heart




Submitted on 2006-10-05 07:16:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  i like this, seems like your really mad at this person it is good that you can express it.. nice job
some changes could be made though
in the fourth stanza verse thingy almost last line should that be thinking of your crying??
i don't reall like that almost last verse well just the first part of it the "is this real or am i just going insane" i think if something else was put there
like.....
well i can't think of anything better so maybe im wrong??
only one more suggestion the part were it says well i hope you bled, tears...
maybe take out the comma and take off the well at the beggining

but its your song so if you like it the way it is keep it that way its still good.
Vynom
| Posted on 2006-10-06 00:00:00 | by PryncessVynom | [ Reply to This ]


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