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    dots Submission Name: Of Life & Deathdots
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    Author: Vampiric Death
    Elite Ratio:    2.27 - 133/159/91
    Words: 74
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsOf Life & Deathdots
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    Death is life,
    Life is death.
    All things born must die,
    All who die are born again.
    And those that with Sin are brave?
    Theirs is the Kingdom of HELL!

    To be on Earth is to live in strife,
    We fight each other to the last breath.
    To live on Earth is to live a lie,
    The birth of lie is the birth of sin.
    Who shall HE save?
    Only GOD can tell!




    Submitted on 2006-10-05 09:13:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      These last two are pretty descriptive all on their own. They're also similar. Thematicly, it's about the great unknown, right? I mean death. As always, you're expressions are great and the flow is in combination with the free verse style. Nice going.
    | Posted on 2006-10-05 00:00:00 | by Porcelaine | [ Reply to This ]
      THis is good. It comes from an interesting perspective and is pretty original. The only thing that got me was the line : "And those that with Sin are brave?" is a bit confusing. I still don't understand it. The rest was well writen and the jump from talking about hell to God between the stanzas was a good idea. Good piece, keep writing.


    Sarah
    | Posted on 2006-10-05 00:00:00 | by S.A.M. | [ Reply to This ]


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