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    dots Submission Name: Haiku for Ragedots
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    Author: Vampiric Death
    Elite Ratio:    2.27 - 133/159/91
    Words: 13
    Class/Type: Haiku/Misc
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    dotsHaiku for Ragedots
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    He feels anger rise
    Deep down inside of his soul
    The darkness explodes




    Submitted on 2006-10-05 09:17:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      nice haiku dude. it feels true.
    | Posted on 2007-07-07 00:00:00 | by DaGrimReaperess | [ Reply to This ]
      sweet! its cool how your hiku isnt about nature... most of them are so its really cool that you chose to write about rage.
    so short but totaly awsome.....i feel rage often....i can relate to your poem, good job

    Isabella
    | Posted on 2007-01-23 00:00:00 | by IsabellaAurora | [ Reply to This ]
      William:
    This is a very good haiku. I enjoy haiku that are not specifically about nature, but rather humans, and especailly having to do with their emotions, and this captures that very well. I wonder if this is about yourself, someone you know, or just something that came into your head. It is a 5 out of 5 in my book. Well done, and keep writing haiku.
    ~Mykquillion
    | Posted on 2007-01-22 00:00:00 | by Mykquillion | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked the last line. It's a great punchline. It takes to be a good poet to make something so short a good write but it doesn't surprise me that you succeeded.
    | Posted on 2006-11-09 00:00:00 | by Porcelaine | [ Reply to This ]
      Not too bad...I would just leave out the 'the' in the first line. Otherwise it's a great way to explain rage with so few words!

    Candi
    | Posted on 2006-10-06 00:00:00 | by dreamweaver | [ Reply to This ]
      you describe rage very well in a few short lines, thats good work!!
    whirl**
    | Posted on 2006-10-05 00:00:00 | by whirl | [ Reply to This ]


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