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    dots Submission Name: Angrydots
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    Author: Areinaka
    ASL Info:    20, F, Oregon, USA
    Elite Ratio:    3.91 - 130/114/29
    Words: 29
    Class/Type: Poetry/Angry
    Total Views: 770
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 234



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       I really like this one. I love the word canted. I was really pissed. Hmm.... Not much else.


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    dotsAngrydots
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    Brows canted at a cocky angle
    Eyes portraying emotion unknown.
    Lips pursed, bloodless white.
    Fists clenched, pupils wide.

    Vengeful thoughts frolicking
    Across the mind of
    The Betrayed.




    Submitted on 2006-10-05 11:57:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      YO Areinaka!
    I like the idea, but I don't think it demenstrates very bold anger. All the words are fairly simple, yet, I don't think you are trying to portray inner anger becasue the words you use are desciribing the physical qualities of anger. I think to portray better anger, you shoudladd more forceful words. There is no emotion right now, but I think it has potential.
    ~Catoic~
    | Posted on 2006-10-05 00:00:00 | by Caotic_Disaster | [ Reply to This ]


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