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    dots Submission Name: funeral of a LEADERdots
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    Author: draconus
    ASL Info:    23/MALE/UK
    Elite Ratio:    1.89 - 49/101/59
    Words: 69
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 679
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 408



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       this is on my role play. hope ya all like it. and yes i know i have made spelling misstakes and i dont give a flying pigs tail. just so you know: thaks draconus


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    dotsfuneral of a LEADERdots
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    as the days crash down
    and the tears do fall
    all you people wonder
    what started this fight.

    the nights of the tossing
    the nights of the turning
    leadered to the midnights dream
    to become the underworlds release

    with tears in our eyes
    and sorrow in our soil
    we keep our dreams clear
    to keep the fights no more




    Submitted on 2006-10-05 12:15:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Kinda good, but where was all the death and destruction? That could've topped it with a cherry. :P
    | Posted on 2006-10-05 00:00:00 | by Shadow24968 | [ Reply to This ]
      Your titled got me interested on this peice although I feel there could be more to this peice. as if your leaving a pice of the story of ... just a thought but nevertheless... its great lots of emotion I like that.

    ~*Jackie*~
    | Posted on 2006-10-05 00:00:00 | by jackz | [ Reply to This ]


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