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    dots Submission Name: the funeral servicedots
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    Author: draconus
    ASL Info:    23/MALE/UK
    Elite Ratio:    1.89 - 49/101/59
    Words: 90
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 1021
    Average Vote:    3.0000
    Bytes: 520



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    dotsthe funeral servicedots
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    we are the dreamers
    and we dream to well.
    we dreamed to much
    that we couln't tell

    we forgot all the pain
    and we forgot all the tears
    but what we forgot most
    was that of the fear.

    why are we like this
    why dont we care
    is it we cant notice it
    or that we are to scared.

    so listern to your heart
    and listern to the soil
    for if we do this
    we won't have this no more





    Submitted on 2006-10-05 12:22:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this was written well. Though there were some typing errors and improper english, it was well written flowed well and it rhymed exquisetly. Keep up the nice work and I'll keep reading.

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    | Posted on 2006-10-05 00:00:00 | by skullreaperX_X | [ Reply to This ]


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