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    dots Submission Name: only youdots

    Author: wildriver
    ASL Info:    18/Female/kearney, NE
    Elite Ratio:    1.84 - 13/12/12
    Words: 88
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 546
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       this is about that special someone...

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    dotsonly youdots

    you sigh
    and look at me
    like i'm the greatest treasure
    on this earth.

    you hold my hand.
    i feel your pulse,
    i need your voice;
    i suddenly have worth.

    Our paths cross,
    ruby rose petals fall;
    glittering raindrops drip around me,
    you look just like a doll.

    your angelic face
    melts my heart;
    your voice tears my nightmares
    into a million tiny shards.

    I wake up suddenly next to you,
    and thank God silently
    for a love that is true

    Submitted on 2006-10-05 13:42:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      aww i can tell you really appreciate having this person in your life. you wrote this very well. my favorite lines were:
    "I wake up suddenly next to you,
    and thank God silently
    for a love that is true"
    this write was so sweet. im glad two people can be so much in love. well done...
    </3 lisa
    | Posted on 2006-10-06 00:00:00 | by 777sacrites777 | [ Reply to This ]
      really nice...this poem is on the verge of superb
    keep it up

    | Posted on 2006-10-06 00:00:00 | by blu_kittin | [ Reply to This ]
      aww this is sweet. I can relate to this poem. Although I have a hard time writing about feelings such as these. I started writing from a horrible tradgedy I went through. And I've just always wrote about the negtive things ... about the bad feelings... Anyhow.. great job I like this a lot

    | Posted on 2006-10-05 00:00:00 | by jackz | [ Reply to This ]

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