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    dots Submission Name: Contradictiondots
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    Author: Poly Jean
    ASL Info:    31/f/FarAway
    Elite Ratio:    4.46 - 382/259/68
    Words: 125
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 333
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 837



    Description:
       I know this is far from my best work, but since I haven’t written anything in a while this one turned quite all right.
    Comments and suggestion are welcomed, as always. Thank you


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsContradictiondots
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    Oh how she needs to be seen
    consumed by your eye, adored
    like a new born desire
    she needs to be
    comforted and protected
    guided through life by every rule
    yet temptress, tempted
    she needs you to break
    her, and every possible rule
    ‘till everything is blown apart.

    She wants to be held
    held tighter
    with her back against the wall
    hiding head in he root of your neck,
    swallowing breathless tears
    a bitter pill known so well
    she needs to be tasted, flavored sweet and fresh.
    She needs to be new through you
    an intimate revelation, your only blasphemy
    that you will adore
    And devour, sooner than late.

    But the question mark of her eye you don’t see






    Submitted on 2006-10-05 14:29:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Or it could be just great writing???
    This is very good Poly Jean!! So much emotion in it and I know we all feel this way from time to time.
    Great write!!!
    Thanks for sharing.
    Kelley Frost
    | Posted on 2007-11-19 00:00:00 | by whendt | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, this is an amazing write I have to agree with your first comment. being about a relationship that makes you self-destructive... wow this is great says so much to me... amazing for something that you wrote after taking a break

    ~!*Jackie*!~
    | Posted on 2007-09-18 00:00:00 | by jackz | [ Reply to This ]
      You dropped the t in the in St2 Ln 4

    Hmm this speaks to me on so many levels... I think it has to do with being in a relationship that makes you self-destructive when you don't recieve the full emotion you need. Craving one thing but settling for something less in the name of Love...or perhaps it's only lust, and you just never knew...

    It's questioning your judgement about what your doing and if your feelings are returned but being too week to ask or demand.

    This may not be what you intended at all, but it sparks that memory for me so that's where my mind went to interpret.

    For a release from writer's block...or just lack of motivation and inspiration this is rather good.

    jan
    | Posted on 2006-10-05 00:00:00 | by jaycee | [ Reply to This ]



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