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Contradiction


Author: Poly Jean
ASL Info:    31/f/FarAway
Elite Ratio:    4.46 - 382 /259 /68
Words: 125
Class/Type: Poetry /Serious
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I know this is far from my best work, but since I haven’t written anything in a while this one turned quite all right.
Comments and suggestion are welcomed, as always. Thank you


Contradiction




Oh how she needs to be seen
consumed by your eye, adored
like a new born desire
she needs to be
comforted and protected
guided through life by every rule
yet temptress, tempted
she needs you to break
her, and every possible rule
‘till everything is blown apart.

She wants to be held
held tighter
with her back against the wall
hiding head in he root of your neck,
swallowing breathless tears
a bitter pill known so well
she needs to be tasted, flavored sweet and fresh.
She needs to be new through you
an intimate revelation, your only blasphemy
that you will adore
And devour, sooner than late.

But the question mark of her eye you don’t see






Submitted on 2006-10-05 14:29:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Or it could be just great writing???
This is very good Poly Jean!! So much emotion in it and I know we all feel this way from time to time.
Great write!!!
Thanks for sharing.
Kelley Frost
| Posted on 2007-11-19 00:00:00 | by whendt | [ Reply to This ]
  Wow, this is an amazing write I have to agree with your first comment. being about a relationship that makes you self-destructive... wow this is great says so much to me... amazing for something that you wrote after taking a break

~!*Jackie*!~
| Posted on 2007-09-18 00:00:00 | by jackz | [ Reply to This ]
  You dropped the t in the in St2 Ln 4

Hmm this speaks to me on so many levels... I think it has to do with being in a relationship that makes you self-destructive when you don't recieve the full emotion you need. Craving one thing but settling for something less in the name of Love...or perhaps it's only lust, and you just never knew...

It's questioning your judgement about what your doing and if your feelings are returned but being too week to ask or demand.

This may not be what you intended at all, but it sparks that memory for me so that's where my mind went to interpret.

For a release from writer's block...or just lack of motivation and inspiration this is rather good.

jan
| Posted on 2006-10-05 00:00:00 | by jaycee | [ Reply to This ]


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