Description: An ode to the morning. The way it wakes each of us in it's own gentle way. She is the lover you will never wake with out. The one who will be there every time you open your eyes in her realm....no matter what you do...the sun will always rise...and the morning will always make love to your sleeping self waking you gently.
Cycle of the Morning Lover -------------------------------------------
Filters through the window
Like sweet golden honey
It kisses flesh
Like a lover
And wakes you
With it's warm sweet breath
The gentle morning lover
To the harsh hag of the afternoon
The sensual warm breath
Becoming arid and hot
Of the sun
Leads to the cold
Temptress of the night
Stealing the warmth from skin
As you sleep with her
Without a choice
The moon sets
The sky lightens
And the gentle lover
That is morning
Returns to you once again
To claim you
As her own
Warming your flesh
More than a human heat
Seducing you to the waking world
So you love her
As well as she loves you
It is weird, but upon first reading this, it gave me a new feeling toward morning, a sense that morning was out to get you, laugh at that as you may, but morning became a person to me, inspiring thoughts of a sickening unwelcoming, a sense that morning was tauntingly laughing as it wakens you with its piercing ray tentacles, causing you to become absorbed in it. Maybe because I never thought of it as a welcoming greeting card before. Anyway, I loved this piece instantly because of the imagery, the personification. Then, I also liked the description of each phase of 'day' and the feeling behind each one, a pattern of moods. Well, the second time reading it, it seems like the phases are talking to the person. Morning is telling her with unspoken words that she needs to have energy and that the time for rebuilding is over. Time to face the day and its trials. Time to see what you can do with the time the sun has given to you. And night is saying, I'll shut your eyes for you, so you no longer have to think and feel life.
Yes, I liked it. Thank you for your inspiration.
I love this! "The gentle morning lover" that phrase speaks to me with such intensity. I'm a hopeless romantic and lover of... well beauty. how often have I not felt what you describe so vivid in this poem. there are two miss spellings (well one unsure but...) the first is temptess, I think it should be spelled temptress but I'm not sure. the other is claim, in the second to last row in the second to last stanza. otherwise this poem is a pleasure to read, mostly because you've appealed to a side of me that isn't verry often reached by others. thank you! // The Little Good Wolf
wow! this is amazing! well thought out and cleverly plot out. this is by far one of, if not, my favorites by you. i have nothing to say on critisism. this is as close to perfect as i can think of. great job i hope to see more like this from you!
Personally, this poem is very different from alot of things I read, I have seen writer after writer to try to pull off a poem of collected thaughts with no real schemes in particular, but I feel that you have managed to pull this off, it was a very enjoyable read for me and it really seemed to hit home, this style is realy hard to pull off, but you did it was very well done keep up the good work!
The radiance behind this poem is the fact that it is light and reflects nature as it is. You've taken something beautiful and made it more beautiful in words. I must congradulate you for that.
your title was an excellent choice; it shows uniqueness and style. I didn't really get your structure though because it started at six stanzas and then settled for seven, still if i didn't count, i guess i never would had guessed.
I didn't really like the way you've begun your piece. The first stanza didn't work for me at all. I thought that it was a very weak beginning especially those lines:
Like sweet golden honey Like a lover And wakes you with it's warm sweet breath
To me, i felt that better words can be found for light.
Other than that, after the first stanza, you've gradually picked it up and made it more and more interesting. I really did enjoy reading this. It was a light poem that i can easily take to heart so thanks for sharing this.