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Author: shambolic
ASL Info:    19.Female.Mozchester
Elite Ratio:    1.92 - 10 /11 /15
Words: 58
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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I actually like food shopping so i don't know where this tirade came from


a window opens
but its shut

a cupboard looks full
but its not

that means shopping
shiny floors and shiny
shiny coins and shiny boys

wheels go squeak
i go squeak
in pain in the burning

red bleach, blue bleach
pink bleach
do you care?
do i care?

Submitted on 2006-10-05 15:47:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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