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    Author: wildriver
    ASL Info:    18/Female/kearney, NE
    Elite Ratio:    1.84 - 13/12/12
    Words: 62
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 493
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 440



    Description:
       have you ever gotten up really early in the morning and walked past a fountain as the sun is just coming up??


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    dotsSplashdots
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    early sun faces the world,
    water splashes here to there;
    sparkle dreaming fantastic morning,
    and I without a care.

    Time again to go on,
    meet crossed paths,
    create more time;
    it's no wonder
    i can make the world mine.

    Conquer,
    take;
    accept and make
    a world that shimmers
    like morning water
    on a smooth glass lake




    Submitted on 2006-10-05 19:12:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      the idea, while done before, is still refreshing...your style lacks that attention grabbin gquality you would expect from the title....
    your flow is a bit sub par, but over all, you have potential....
    keep trying.
    | Posted on 2006-10-06 00:00:00 | by blu_kittin | [ Reply to This ]
      this is really cool, im not sure what to say about it other than i really like it and it just hs osme really cool imagery
    | Posted on 2006-10-09 00:00:00 | by Master Bates | [ Reply to This ]


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