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    dots Submission Name: The Leopard of Naplesdots
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    Author: xingu32
    ASL Info:    18, Male, WA
    Elite Ratio:    2.04 - 9/18/36
    Words: 228
    Class/Type: Poetry/
    Total Views: 122
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    dotsThe Leopard of Naplesdots
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    Slowly sawing the red meat in front of her, the blood oozes out between the cut
    Watery and bloody, it smells delicious, it almost smells heavenly
    She slowly and ever so carefully stabs the piece of meat with her long fork
    Stabbing it like one uses a pencil to write, slowly and decisively
    Eloquently, she twists her wrist and brings it to her ruby red lips
    Ever courtly, she takes it into her mouth
    Like a lioness she slowly munches and chews and savors
    Her black dress of pure silk swishes around her ankles in the wind
    Placing knife and fork down on the side of her plate
    She gathers the napkin from her lap in her right hand
    Slowly dabbing the sides of her mouth with a white napkin, so as to not smudge her lipstick
    She slowly shifts and repositions her legs to cover her legs hit from the breeze
    She talks and chats with me, ever smooth, always seductive, never off balance
    Taking slow sips of Brunello di Montalicino, she looks coyly over the top of her crystal glass
    Pushing the finished bone of the steak away, leaving behind the pieces of fat she trimmed off
    Placing her hands in her lap she talks politely, sipping on wine
    The time is getting late
    Calling for a bill, and receiving it minutes later, I winced




    Submitted on 2006-10-05 21:24:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like this poem. Its really diffrent how you used certain adjectives. She seems almos inhumanly perfect and unique. The only part that bothered me was the end. It seems almost unfinished. I dont really see a purpose to this write, only that it was an occurance of some kind.

    Best of Wishes,
    SarahE.P.

    P.S. Comment some of my work if you get a chance.
    | Posted on 2006-10-05 00:00:00 | by SarahE.P. | [ Reply to This ]



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