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Freedom of the road

Author: Vastmark
ASL Info:    29/M/U.K
Elite Ratio:    6.02 - 225 /171 /26
Words: 203
Class/Type: Poetry /Comedy
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Just a bit of a laugh, my tire blew out the other day and influenced this.

Tried to make this an exersize as in sylable count didn't worry to much about the stresses and non stresses so feel free to iron anything out.

Freedom of the road

I cannot describe the way that I feel
When I’m driving in my automobile
When roads are clear and my life’s my own
I feel like a king atop my throne.

Until it happens from out of the blue
My love develops a case of car flu
Coughing, wheezing and spluttering she goes
Gone from my dreams to a long list of woes.

“Carburettor’s gone mate, it’ll cost a bomb”
Says a little grease monkey singing a song
Licking his lips at the sight of my cash
A smile on a face you’d just love to smash.

We’re back on the road in really good form
Speeding through life like a lightening storm
The world drops behind in hand with my cares
I tease up her speedo to where eagles dare.

Isolation though is not what it seems
Deep into nowhere, unheard went my screams
Finding out too late that I needed to pee
When the tyre blew from underneath me.

Now that she’s fixed and we’re back on the ‘mac
I prefer to drive slow, and not use the jack
To drive her is still what makes me shine
A financial nightmare, but she’s all mine.

Submitted on 2006-10-06 12:17:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I've had a car my whole life, and since I practically lived in it and it normally decided to get flat tyres on the expressways, AND the repairman always thought I knew nothing about automobiles...I have to say your piece has reminded me about those days.

"develops a case of car flu", my first one went this way :(. Guess she was just fixed too many times. I can't say I know the joy of being my own car king, because I don't know how to drive, but the passenger seat is just as exhilarating. I think I'd prefer being driven to driving, to be honest, otherwise I wouldn't have the time to stick my head out the window and drink in the fresh air..(mostly fresh! Do not attempt this during traffic jams!)

It's amusing, but such a very veritable case of what happens when you love your car too much.
Freedom of the road for you always!

| Posted on 2007-09-08 00:00:00 | by Azuire | [ Reply to This ]
  This is really cute, Phil. I can relate because

I just dropped me tailpipe Tuesday
and it was lie that the ad said repairs
cost 59.95 and I asked them why?
and he said, "cause we're running empty bays!"

I told him thanks for you honesty!

It sounds like the blowout timing was not so opportune,
she's a beauty eh? Nice rhyme, it made laugh!

| Posted on 2007-05-25 00:00:00 | by nansofast | [ Reply to This ]
  lol - very amusing, in a well-written way. Made me giggle :)
| Posted on 2007-05-23 00:00:00 | by Mandi Gayle | [ Reply to This ]
  Every man's love affair with his auto, too cute. A very timely read also, since my own 17 year old Mercury (near classic!) blew a water hose on me shortly into a 140 mile trip only yesterday. Between the tow job to my own grease monkey Lee, whose name I had almost forgotten in the last year, the hose, coolant, and a brake job which was overdue, there went the $ 400 dollars I made last week but haven't received yet. Thank goodness for credit. At least it's paid for.
| Posted on 2007-01-05 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]
  Hee hee!!! This is a most amusing and funny poem, and despite all its humor, it is sooooo true!! First, I must say, I am glad that you were not hurt when your tire blew out. I have never experienced that myself, but I have seen it happen to others driving on the road and it is pretty nerve wracking. The car swerves all over the place with rubber flying everywhere. This poem is well written and very entertaining. The one thing about cars that sucks is how expensive they can be. It seems that when a car ages and one thing goes, you know that there are a million other things just waiting to break down and before you know it you are in the middle of a financial crisis with the car. But the last line sums it up perfectly, "she's all mine"
Yes indeed. I think it falls into the love/hate relationship category! So nice to see you posting again. Thanks for the laugh with this.

| Posted on 2006-10-21 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
  Ok this made me laugh, I have to agree with Jolie cause I'm right up there with being a fool while driving. I would definitely not have sense of freedom without my car though. A great Poem!

| Posted on 2006-10-09 00:00:00 | by javajunkie | [ Reply to This ]
  WoW!! What a great poem. I really indentified with this one, I am definitely a drivin' fool. I am always takin' off to freedom in my grand am.
| Posted on 2006-10-06 00:00:00 | by Jolie | [ Reply to This ]

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