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    dots Submission Name: wouldnt life be greater?dots
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    Author: EmeRalDEyeZ5491
    ASL Info:    16.female.Ohio
    Elite Ratio:    2.1 - 130/137/105
    Words: 130
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Longing
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       feeling kinda down today i guess


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    dotswouldnt life be greater?dots
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    Wouldn't life be great if instead of using money, you got everything according to wheather u deserved it or not?

    Wouldn't life be great if someone picked you up when you fell, instead of everyone leaning onto you? So what happens if you fall and everyones leaning on you?

    Wouldnt life be great if you never felt pain again? Only happiness and love

    Wouldn't life be great if you could fall in love with only the people who love you back? That way you never felt the pain of seeing *him* slip his hand into a Barbie doll replicas hand.

    Wouldnt life be greater if you everyone was skinny?

    Wouldnt life be greater if everyone was gorgues?

    Wouldnt life be greater?





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      I really liked this, it raises alot of good questions about perfection and societies stantards these days. "*him* slip his hand into a Barbie doll replicas hand." I know exactly what thats like. I love your writing style its so unique and refreshing.
    -katherine elisabeth
    | Posted on 2006-10-21 00:00:00 | by Kehuther115 | [ Reply to This ]


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