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    Author: GothamFreak
    Elite Ratio:    5.1 - 110/48/19
    Words: 53
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    they see me happy
    i laugh with them
    without saying a word
    i look so cheerful
    so in-charge
    always a smile on my face
    like nothings going on
    but my life is a mess
    im confused
    im depressed
    so the next time they tell you
    im perfect
    keep in mind that im not




    Submitted on 2006-10-06 14:58:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I can relate to this, sometimes it's like that for me but my friend has it much worse even tho it all looks so great, a mom a dad a cute little sister tons of sports, straight a's, big house, cool cars, she's not happy. just the other day at our homecoming dance she stops and turns to me and another friend and says "come on guys lets go dance, i'm depressed but i'm still smiling, you guys should too." she's always laughing and smiling but then when the laughter stops you can see that inside it's all a mess for her.

    stay strong

    alina
    | Posted on 2006-10-08 00:00:00 | by luckyms20 | [ Reply to This ]
      Doesn't putting on a smile everyday get exhausting though?
    I think it does... but then again, I've been doing it for ages and I NEVER sleep

    "i laugh with them
    without saying a word"

    What if one day you just get so frustrated with hearing about their pathetic little problems (when you have enough self-control to keep yours to yourself) that you act out in a fit of rage and kill them all?
    lol Okay, maybe thats a little drastic, but everyone explodes eventually... right? You can only fit so much in a certain space before it detonates (well, sometimes).

    I don't know why I'm rambling. I haven't slept in a while.

    Good luck with everything.

    Perfection is a flaw.

    Good stuff
    -nikkki
    | Posted on 2006-10-07 00:00:00 | by Liv2LoveThePain | [ Reply to This ]
      noones perfect yo. its good that u can pretend i cant. i wear my heart on my sleeve. i admire u for that.
    | Posted on 2006-10-06 00:00:00 | by DaGrimReaperess | [ Reply to This ]


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